Thursday, October 15, 2009

Bad Topic 2

Another way to waste the application essay is to omit the evidence. You are working to show who you are. You have thoughts about that, reflections on what you've learned or done. But if you don't give the reader evidence of the truth of your assertions, then, as with a school essay, you're wasting paper.

Remember how your teachers kept saying "Show, don't tell"? Same deal here.

My parents have always been there for me.

Glad to hear it. But show the reader what you mean

My Mom--and surprisingly often my step-dad, too--stood on the sidelines, even when their shoes filled with water, to see me get muddy, get mugged, and (once in awhile) score a goal. I believe you.

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